Ye jo beess crore hain,
jehl ka nichore hain,
tareekion may doobay huay,
dil b inke chor hain,
inko tu daba k rakh,
neend ka jaam pila k rakh,
uthay to sehla dijiyo,
khauf tu inmay basa k rakh,
ba shaoor jo in may uthay to,
zehr pyar se pilao to,
khamosh wo b ho gya,
jabar, agar phir uthay wo to,
ye jo tera mulk hai,
ye teri hi to milk hai,
karachi lahore teri zameen,
tere khel ka maidaan to hai,
ye jo sab ghareeb hain,
inke kya naseeb hain,
zindagi maut maut zindgi,
ek dairay may muheet hain,
to inko tu pisaey ja,
mustaqbil ko inke khaeya ja,
khoon sab nichore lay,
khazanay apne bnaey ja,
ke ye jo tere log hain,
kuch in may bas tere log hain,
pait or niyyat bharta ja,
paisay k sab ye log hain,
tjh ko bura bolain to ye,
keh day tu inse datt k ye,
beess crore ko sula dia,
kya kumm hai mera kamaal ye?
(inspired by habib jalib's main ne us se ye kaha)
11 comments:
shair hogaye ho !
i like the part
zindagi maut maut zindagi,
aik dairay mein muheet hain,
tu inko tu pisaey ja
i love habib jalibs poetry.
havent read urs. will come later to dissect it in detail :p
@misbah
chal oye shair kaha hua hun, i wish i knew poetry its such an effective medium, look at iqbal and faiz and jalib...anyways thanx
@mubi
Acha? I was wondering where're you.okay i'll wait for your next visit.
How true... But you wrote it yourself, right? That technically makes you a poet :D
Yes i wrote it myself...but...may shayr to naheeeen...lol..
nice inspiration man
too good
aray mai tu yahan hi hoon :(
btw i liked the poem on the whole, how you interpreted the present situation from your perspective.. esp this part
ye jo sab ghareeb hain,
inke kya naseeb hain,
zindagi maut maut zindgi,
ek dairay may muheet hain,
to inko tu pisaey ja,
mustaqbil ko inke khaeya ja,
khoon sab nichore lay,
khazanay apne bnaey ja,
rest i think you cud have rephrased your lines again..nai? just a thought.. baqi its cool :D
@Duffer:
thanx a bunch man
@mubi
thanx for the breakdown into the writing. Yar i know rephrasing could've helped but i didn't think much before or while writing it, just plain thoughts, thats why its a bit out of flow maybe. Thanx for liking it waisay.
@Duffer:
thanx a bunch man
@mubi
thanx for the breakdown into the writing. Yar i know rephrasing could've helped but i didn't think much before or while writing it, just plain thoughts, thats why its a bit out of flow maybe. Thanx for liking it waisay.
:D i know it happens..once you are writing you dont feel like altering anything at that time. happens a lot to me :p i never go bk to edit things :p
Uh huh. You can deny it all you want. You ARE a shair! :P I'm not buying that stuff about you not being one.
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